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My Resume
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On this page, I've included the majority of my past experiences. To read my thoughts on the work I've done, as well as my philosophy moving forward, you may visit the "About" page of this site. Below my interactive resume, I give an example of a critical essay that I've revised, so you may see my experience put into action.
Carnegie Mellon University. Pittsburgh, PA
Master of Arts in Rhetoric. Expected May 2025
Mississippi College. Clinton, MS
Bachelor of Arts in English Writing. May 2024
GPA: 3.67, Program GPA: 4.0
Minors in English Literature, Graphic Design, and Applied Humanities
Deep Revision
I am incredibly proud of my experiences as an English scholar, and I believe that they have drastically improved my writing ability. To demonstrate this improvement, I have included the revised first page of my first significant college essay. You may read about my experiences and qualifications through my resume listed above, but here I want to demonstrate the skills I've gained--specifically, my ability to discuss unconventional texts in a manner that is still professional. For this revision, that meant reshaping how I communicated in order to best suit my audience.
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Dead Poets Society is considered by many to be a classic. There is a lot of things to be admired in the film. The cinematography is stunning and professional. The soundtrack fits perfectly. But what really makes the movie is the characters and the plot they are involved in. Just like the title implies, the film is about a group of boys who eventually become the newest members of the Dead Poets Society. Todd Anderson, the shy new kid, moves into his dorm at Welton Academy, a prestigious male preparatory school. His roommate, Neil Perry is almost the opposite of Todd when it comes to social skills. He is extremely outgoing and makes conversation with Todd very naturally. As the two boys unpack, Neil’s other friends, Knox Overstreet, Steven Meeks and Charlie Dalton, all pile into Neil’s room. It is this group that is influenced and changed the most dramatically as the movie goes on. Other characters are just as fundamental to the plot, but it is this select few that are changed the most throughout the film. As the school year takes off, the boys meet a new teacher at Welton named Mr. Keating. He ends up teaching the boys not only literature but many valuable life lessons. It is here that the group hears about the Dead Poets Society. Soon after joining, the new members’ lives begin to change forever. Everyone’s values begin to change, and their actions and words show that. Each of the boys came to Welton living the life their parents commanded them to. Not a single one of them was pursuing a career they chose for themselves. Each and every one of them was living life unconsciously; in fact, they were debatably living a life that was not their own. However, after being influenced by Mr. Keating, the boys start to live life consciously. Their new lives brought newfound sources of joy and adventure. This sounds amazing, but the film takes a dark turn when Neil takes his own life, leaving his friends with a heavy decision to make. Would they turn back to their old lives or stay true to the conscious lives they had come to value? Todd ends up being the one to decide. He literally takes a stand in the final scene of the movie, displaying that he still values conscious living. His friends follow his bold action, and the film ends there. This group of boys end up having whole new values, new lives even, and they value their new conscious lives far more than their old ones.
The characters within Dead Poets Society are the most important component of the film, although it is filmed with incredible cinematography and paired with a fantastic score. As the title implies,
the film is about a group of boys who eventually become the newest members of the Dead Poets Society. Todd Anderson, the shy new kid, moves into his dorm at Welton Academy, a prestigious male preparatory school. His roommate, Neil Perry is almost the opposite of Todd in terms of
social skills. He is extremely outgoing and makes conversation with Todd very naturally. As the two boys unpack, Neil’s other friends, Knox Overstreet, Steven Meeks and Charlie Dalton, all pile into Neil’s room. This group changes the most dramatically as the movie progresses, with each of them undergoing significant personal growth. Other side characters are also important to the plot, but this select few that change the most throughout the film. As the school year takes off, the boys meet a new teacher at Welton named Mr. Keating, who teaches them life lessons through literature. Here the group hears about the Dead Poets Society from Keating. Soon after joining, the new members’ lives begin to change forever. Everyone’s values begin to change, and their actions and words show that. Each of the boys came to Welton living the life their parents commanded them to, and none of them were pursuing a career that they chose for themselves. All of them were living life unconsciously because they were never allowed to make their own decisions. Neil Perry, who seems the most impacted by Keating, starts to realize that they were living lives that were not their own. However, after being influenced by Mr. Keating, the boys start to live life consciously. Their new lives brought newfound sources of joy and adventure. Unfortunately, Neil's father gets word of his son acting directly against his will, and he removes Neil from the school. For Neil, this strips him from his own newfound life, which he sees as worse than death, causing him to take his own life. The Dead Poets are left with a heavy decision to make. Each of them had to personally choose to either return back to their old, easier life with no control or continue to live consciously. Although They had all found value in conscious living, Neil's death made them question if it was worth it. Todd, the once quietest of them all, boldly decides to live consciously. He takes a literal stand in the final scene of the movie, displaying that he still values conscious living. His friends follow his bold action, and the film ends shortly after. The Dead Poets find new lives through making their own decisions, and they learn to value their new conscious lives far more than their old ones, even if conscious living proves to be more difficult at challenging times.
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